Kia ora, I am a student at St Francis of Assisi School, Welcome - Haere Mai. I am in Year 6 and my teacher is Mrs Carney. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
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Sunday, May 10, 2020
Diving Giraffes
Clip clop clip clop the giraffes are coming to the swimming pool. Watch out there is a giraffe hanging. Oh no not the giraffes hanging again. We'll never get them out of the pool. Watch all the giraffes dive into the pool. The first giraffe jumps up and gets thrown into a ball and down they go to the bottom of the pool.
The first giraffe comes out and heads to the floor switch to make it go down. Then the second giraffe starts running and makes a humongous leap to the hanging giraffe throws him into a ball and down he goes to the bottom of the pool.
There has to be hundreds of giraffes waiting in line. Looking up at the security cameras and sniffing them. The third giraffe makes a huge splash after getting thrown up into the air before coming down and looking like he's sitting at the bottom of the pool. Then they come bouncing back to the top and walk out.
Suddenly a second Giraffe appears hanging lower than the other one. A Giraffe comes bouncing out of a lower diving board to leap up at the lower giraffe and down he goes with all four legs out he makes a splash that reaches the lowest diving board.
The next giraffe in line flings up but high he almost hits the roof but luckily he ducks his head just in time. Then he comes flying down like a bird nosing down to get its prey. He comes trotting out very quickly like he wants to push in line and keep doing it until he gets tired.
They all looked really thirsty so they started drinking litres of water soon there wasn't much water left so they had to fill the water up and have some more fun. They raced each other to the top of the swimming board.
Finally they decided they would go home and let all the people who were trying to go for a swim in. They had so much fun though. I wonder if they will come again tomorrow.
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Hi Benjamin
ReplyDeleteGreat story on the day out at the pool for the giraffes! I really like your use of different types of writing such as the use of a simile when you described the giraffe flying down like a bird nosing down to get its prey, well done! Fantastic ending it leads the reader pondering will there be a follow up story?
Katrina