I got a idea to write about a Motorcycle Race. Here is my story. I hope you enjoy.
Motor Race
Welcome back to the Motor Race tourtomant. We are now at the last two teams in the first lane we have Jamaica's Gorge swain who is second at the moment he has 9000 points. In first place with 10000 points is New zealand's Brian carge.
5 4 3 2 … 1 Go!!!!!! Brian takes the lead jumps over the bridge and makes a jump into the muddiest put which is the ditch Gorge is struggling to catch up but he just couldn't get near him Brian was already in the trees which is where they started so Brians got two more laps to go and Gorge is in the weaving park but keeps bumping into the double weave.
Brian went into the out to the forest bit and then he went into the Motor pool and started skidding round suddenly there was a huge bump and in flies Brian into the pool. Gorge is going past the line now but Brian has finally passed the pool and back into the rally course where he has to do a lap.
Gorge is going really fast through the pool and doesn't even fall into the pool. Brian does the lap quickly and goes into the weaving again. After a while Brian goes into the forest with Gorge not far behind.
Because Brian is in the front he gets to choose which lap he wants to do so he decided to do the flying bridge lap so Gorge had to do the pool one. Brian flyed up the bridge and landed in the muddy ditch and got out of the ditch. Brian could see that George was going really fast; they met each other in the weaving Brian was going really fast through the weaving. George was a little bit behind Brian.
Brian was going into the forest and was rolling up to the ramp and he went flying through the forest. He had almost finished his last lap and the tape was broken for Brian. Gorge was 4 seconds behind Brian.
Brian gets Gold He didn't even lose a game he won all of them. Gorge gets Silver. Everyone was going wild. They were so happy.
Tuesday, April 28, 2020
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Hi Benjamin
ReplyDeleteYour story about the motor cross is very detailed and builds suspense, well done. I had to keep reading as I wanted to know what the outcome was and that's a great skill to achieve to keep the reader captivated until the end. Go Brian from New Zealand! How did you come up with the idea for the story?
Katrina
Hi Katrina,
ReplyDeleteI got the idea from Pobble 365. I hope you have a good day.
Benjamin